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In the pain of my silence,
I'm about to break!
It will end with violence,
Because this is more than I can take!
The pain is like a fire,
Rolling right through me!
The pain is truly blinding,
I really cannot see!

You, (you), did this to me...
With your selfishness and greed,
You put your wants,
Before my needs...

So I am taking!

I am taking...everything!
Everything you hold dear!
I am breaking...everything!
I want to reduce you to tears!
I want to be!
The last thing that you see...
Before you sleep...

The anger in my heart,
Is fighting to get out!
And I don't know where to start,
But I know I want to break you down!
The pain is like a fire,
Rolling right through me!
The pain is truly blinding,
I really cannot see!

You, (you), did this to me, (to me, to me),
With your selfishness and greed,
Why did you put your wants,
Before my needs?

And so I am taking!

I am taking...everything!
Everything you hold dear!
I am breaking...everything!
I want to see your tears!
I want to be!
The last thing that you see...
Before you sleep...

Before you turn out the lights,
I will be there!
Before you close your eyes,
I will be there!
Before you can dream,
I will be in your mind...
And I will not be kind!

Because I am taking!

I am taking...everything!
Everything you hold dear!
I am breaking...everything!
I want to reduce you to tears!
I am taking...everything!
Everything that you love!
I am breaking...everything!
Everything that you think of!
I want to be...!
The last thing that you see...
Before you sleep!
              (sleep!)
               (sleep!)
                (sleep!)

jlp  May 20, 2009
The final finished version of a piece I've been working on for a long time.

I hope you like it. :)

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Myredemption023 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2010
Awesome job :D
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TheseKrimzonFlames Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2010
:D Thank ya.
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Myredemption023 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2010
^_^
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EatingMyOwnFears Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2009
WTG on the honorable mention!! :dance:
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TheseKrimzonFlames Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2009
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Lol, i voted myself out of the win :D :giggle:
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EatingMyOwnFears Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2009
awww
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TheseKrimzonFlames Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2009
I had to! The piece was amazing!
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EatingMyOwnFears Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2009
:)
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FireflyPhotosAust Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2009  Professional Photographer
As you received an honourable mention in the Seven Deadly Sins Contest you have been featured here [link]
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caybeach Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Congratulations! This piece has won an honourable mention in the Seven Deadly Sins Contest :D [link]
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caybeach Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
:D :clap: :love:
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caybeach Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
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Paper-Thin-Skull Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2009
i love the lyrical ingenuity this piece has potential for. very good, at first i thought of it as cliche' but then rather saw more of a heart felt poem. i loved the two lines " he put my wants before my needs" and "i will reduce you to tears" either sounds familure, or it just really sticks out. nice job.
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TheseKrimzonFlames Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2009
:) Thank you very much! :heart:
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underworldriver Featured By Owner May 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
That was in-fucking-tense! :faint: :heart: :heart: Your words are like beasts that attack the audience in full force. I love it so much!
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underworldriver Featured By Owner May 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
you're welcome my dear. :love:
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sadconfusion Featured By Owner May 24, 2009   Writer
intense
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TheseKrimzonFlames Featured By Owner May 24, 2009
very. :XD: :glomp:
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sadconfusion Featured By Owner May 24, 2009   Writer
i love it :D
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Piaf1 Featured By Owner May 24, 2009  Student Photographer
Wow wouldn't like to get on wrong side of you. :rose:



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TheseKrimzonFlames Featured By Owner May 24, 2009
Not really a good idea, no. :)
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Piaf1 Featured By Owner May 24, 2009  Student Photographer
Ha Ha :giggle:



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Spashleylove Featured By Owner May 23, 2009   Writer
I adore this piece, the emotion was amazing! :)
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TheseKrimzonFlames Featured By Owner May 23, 2009
Thank you sweetie. :)
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Spashleylove Featured By Owner May 23, 2009   Writer
:) :hug:
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EternalFreedom Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
i love the emotion in it :heart:
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Malandante Featured By Owner May 20, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:love: :wow: Awesome.
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Malandante Featured By Owner May 20, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:iconhuggleplz:
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner May 20, 2009   Writer
The anger in my heart,
Is fighting to get out!
And I don't know where to start,
But I know I want to break you down!


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TheseKrimzonFlames Featured By Owner May 20, 2009
:bow: Thank you. :)
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Aedammair-Feline Featured By Owner May 20, 2009
Strong words :)
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xD-smileees Featured By Owner May 20, 2009   Photographer
this is amazing!
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TheseKrimzonFlames Featured By Owner May 20, 2009
Thank you!
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DayinTynSane Featured By Owner May 20, 2009   Writer
:heart:
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